Friday, May 10, 2013

orange moon song

our town is quiet tonight,
he says while
outlining the orange moon then
pinching it between his thumb and finger.
it’s easy to turn god while holding something
so mighty and cratered.
you can feel undamaged and holy
if you aren’t careful.
but it must be loud,
i thought.
(we must not have been listening all the way through,
just in the wishy-washy type of way)

in the dark navy night of august,
our town whimpers reminiscences
between the corners of trees and
empty, plastic lawn chairs.
at this hour the roadkill choir sings
and the little boy who drowned
in the pond dances,
while his mom asks the murky, green water
if he jumped off the trestle or fell.
she asks this question every night,
but he only dances on the
full orange moon song day.

as i sit beside the boy who
can hold the moon,
i wonder what it’s like to watch
a town burn.
it’d be freeing to sing
as we watch each building
fall into itself.
everyone would run outside, just like
how we used to (except with more urgency),
and finally we could become
one with our ghosts.
we’d pet the deer we hit with our cars,
dance with our grandparents we should
have visited more often,
and the little boy who drowned would
ask his mother to think of swinging
and picking poppies when
she thought of him.
she’ll feel weightless then.

he let go of the moon then,
and we turned back into delinquents
sitting on tall hill past curfew.
our town was doused in orange
from light of the moon
and it was quiet,
as it should be.

9 comments:

  1. I LOVE this! The imagery is great. I especially love the stanza with "it's be freeing to sing as we watch each building fall into itself"

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  2. Dear Ms. Molly, I very much like the overriding concept of the orange moon, and I like the navy blue August too, the entire color thing is very neat-o

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  3. Let's go, Poet.
    Molly, I like this poem a lot! I like how there is the present, and there is the imaginative, and when he lets go of the moon everything is normal again

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  4. I love the use of the world orange and moon. I love the lines: "and picking poppies when
    she thought of him.she’ll feel weightless then." the idea of weightlessness and the moon go together quite nicely.

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  5. This is too beautiful. Your imagery is breath-taking. I really like how you think about things and how that turns into a poem.

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  6. This is amazing! The imagery is fantastic, and I love the recurring use of color (orange, navy, murky green etc.) This is a beautiful - great job, Molly!

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  7. I love the underlying theme of innocence throughout all of the heavier imagery and more complex ideas. The boy who fell of the trestle, grandparents who we didnt visit enough, the idea of an empty small town and ghosts..all which we can somehow relate to, and all under the cover of two kids just "sitting on a tall hill past curfew," looking at an orange moon, the theme of dancing... i just really like this!

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  8. I like the imagery in this, nice job!

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  9. I love the title, how it serves as a motif throughout for the suspension of adulthood and pain, how it transforms that pain into something beautiful. The sadness is palpable here, just under the images, but it's also wrapped around the pinpricks of joy. I particularly like the second to last stanza, the mother image is haunting. There are many lines here I love, but one of my favorites: "the town whimpers reminiscences" and "doused in orange". Lovely.

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