Quiet
I believe mostly in sunflowers
and billowing clouds.
My soul moveable,
always edging towards the sun.
My mouth isn't broken
and I never learned to talk with my hands
so I stopped shouting nonsense
and learned how to live quiet.
My whispers died down
to a pleasant nothingness.
I kept moving towards the sun,
I believe mostly in sunflowers
and billowing clouds.
My soul moveable,
always edging towards the sun.
My mouth isn't broken
and I never learned to talk with my hands
so I stopped shouting nonsense
and learned how to live quiet.
My whispers died down
to a pleasant nothingness.
I kept moving towards the sun,
it
turned my transparent skin warm.
I am a ghost
because screaming doesn't become me.
It's safe inside the ground.
It's warm in the silence of my throat.
I am a ghost
because screaming doesn't become me.
It's safe inside the ground.
It's warm in the silence of my throat.
When this poem opened with sunflowers and clouds (which I loved), I was not prepared for the way you unravel it; I really love the surprise of this poem. So many lines I love: "turned my transparent skin warm" and the last line is devastatingly beautiful.
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness I absolutely love this. It was filled with imagery and the idea itself was great. I can't even pick a favorite line!
ReplyDeleteThis is very nice Katiana, because it is about the absence of words, but it is words, which is super cool. And I also love the last line and the transparent skin ghost part. Woot.
ReplyDeleteI really like how this poem evolves into much more than what it was at the beginning, which was clouds and flowers!
ReplyDeleteI like the imagery, and how the poem took on a darker tone at the end!
ReplyDeleteI love how you talk about sunflowers and clouds, but keep getting deeper and deeper as the poem progresses. Loooooovvvvveeeee iiiittttttt!
ReplyDeleteI think your line towards the end of the piece "it's safe inside the ground," brought your initial "sunflower" line full circle. Nature imagery was rolled in seamlessly.
ReplyDeleteI really loved this poem! I love how it opens with the imagery of sunflowers and clouds but soon becomes much deeper and more meaningful! Great job!!
ReplyDeleteYou have really great imagery in this piece. I love it, it really paints a great picture in your head. You did a great job with this!
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