Wednesday, May 12, 2010

Mourning

The larking daylight swings on pitched eaves.

My eyes are like honey bees.

Eastern oil smeared canvas.

Sailing up the golden

boughs. A beginning.

The living daylight. The,

Living, daylight.

Coursing, pulsing, vital, daylight.

Touched by melodious supple honey,

I am alive.

Yet beneath me there is no light.

Beneath me there is no rise.

I stand on a tomb.

A bivouac of decay.

Lifeless forms sheltering

the colony queen;

the mother.

4 comments:

  1. Aaron, I don't quite understand this poem, but that doesn't make it any less awesome. The diction is vivid and I like the contrast between life and death. By the way, what is a bivouac?

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  2. It reminds a bit of Kubla Khan and I think your imagery is amazing. You have a sophisticated voice that is commanding on the page.

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  3. I like your dramatic change in tone and diction from the first half to the second half of the poem and how it reflects your evolving view of life.

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  4. I love the shift in the second half of the poem, the imagery is beautiful, and of course the word "bivouac" makes the poem even more amazing. (bivouac is such a cool word I love how it sounds).

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