Monday, May 5, 2014

Senior Year Symphony

Senior Year Symphony
Haley Perkins

I feel like I am running out of time,
It seems that I have it, but I pretend.
These thoughts form melodies like a wind chime,
Floating through my mind, my worries they mend.

They produce a symphony in my head,
Starting quietly and becoming loud.
Constantly playing as I lay in bed,
I have to remind myself to be proud.

But now it peaks, as the end draws nearer,
At last my thoughts change from what I have feared.
The girl is different in my mirror,
Broken from the symphony, I am here.

Embark, explore, adventures make me grow,
Off to discover new music, I go.
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9 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 7, 2014 at 7:53 AM

    Haley I really like this poem. It says what everyone is thinking at this time of the year. I like the idea of a melody and the song, it's a perfect metaphor for graduating and moving on. It doesn't sound like you forced the rhyme scheme, it flows really nicely and overall is really good!

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  2. AnonymousMay 7, 2014 at 8:03 AM

    I love this Hay! The concept is very relevant and it has a good flow!

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  3. AnonymousMay 7, 2014 at 10:28 AM

    This flows really well. The meter and the rhymes are perfect. Great job!

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  4. AnonymousMay 8, 2014 at 5:50 PM

    I love how relevant this year and I love how you related senior year to a symphony! It made it really interesting! Love it!!

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  5. AnonymousMay 8, 2014 at 7:42 PM

    Excellent job using a symphony as a means to convey your point! It's both relevant and well written. Great job!

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  6. AnonymousMay 9, 2014 at 4:40 AM

    Haley, I really like the shift in this poem. I also really like how you compare it to a symphony. It is a unique and original idea. Good job tying the two together. The poem flows well. I really like the message too! Good job!

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  7. AnonymousMay 9, 2014 at 5:50 AM

    Love the title Haley! And I love how you incorporate the symphony and sound in your poem with the "growing louder" so well done.

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  8. AnonymousMay 9, 2014 at 5:53 AM

    This is so relatable. I think all of us are feeling these things as you are! The comparison to a symphony is elegant and fits perfectly!

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  9. AnonymousMay 9, 2014 at 6:09 AM

    I think that this poem speaks to many seniors. The way you likened senior year's progression to a symphony's crescendo makes this poem more powerful. It's time to move on from GHS!

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