I love the break down you executed within your poem. I lays out a story and allows one to have their own opinion of what is happening but only you know the true meaning. Great job.
While exceedingly simple, I really enjoyed this poem. Each snippet gave me a clear image and the final line really made me think about the impermanence of things and the brevity of our time here on Earth. Nice Work.
Other than thinking you are amazing! I love this poem it. It is abrupt and very to the point which reminds me how truly short life can be. Amazing work!
You cannot write lies and write good poetry. Deceit, abstraction, euphemism: any one of these will doom a poem to the realm of "baffling" or "forgettable," or worse. Good poetry requires precision: if you do not attempt to say, accurately, truthfully, what you feel or see or need, then how will you achieve precision? Poetry means taking control of the language of your life. Poetry names what has been silenced and allows us to understand and articulate our connections to one another and to the world we inhabit. --June Jordan
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This could almost be a haiku if you pared it down by a couple syllables. It's also true; we only have moments.
ReplyDeleteI love the break down you executed within your poem. I lays out a story and allows one to have their own opinion of what is happening but only you know the true meaning. Great job.
ReplyDeleteWhile exceedingly simple, I really enjoyed this poem. Each snippet gave me a clear image and the final line really made me think about the impermanence of things and the brevity of our time here on Earth. Nice Work.
ReplyDeleteOther than thinking you are amazing! I love this poem it. It is abrupt and very to the point which reminds me how truly short life can be. Amazing work!
ReplyDeletevery powerful. Only a few words with a powerful message.
ReplyDeleteThis is powerful but very sad!
ReplyDeleteWow. Thats amazing. So much said in so few words, which is really the only way to do the topic justice. Beautiful work
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