This is my favorite! Giraffes are love. The simplicity of what you are stating fits nicely in haiku format. Oh, and also I like the title. Good work child!
Fantasmical poem, however it's lacking something. Now you're probably wondering what could possibly make this piece of poetry genius any better? This: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zD5I_8ESrpA&feature=related
in this poem I saw a radical marxist statement about American materialism. the speaker expresses a strong desire that the current weather (representing corporations) be exchanged for weather that is "nice." he then goes on to explain his ideas for an ideal America, recognizing through his friends love for giraffes that the greatest ideals in life are vegetarianism (the consumption of mainly leaves, metaphorically a lofty goal for society to attain, and also more literally a lofty goal for giraffes), respect for nature, and the virtues of living communally, as in a herd.
You cannot write lies and write good poetry. Deceit, abstraction, euphemism: any one of these will doom a poem to the realm of "baffling" or "forgettable," or worse. Good poetry requires precision: if you do not attempt to say, accurately, truthfully, what you feel or see or need, then how will you achieve precision? Poetry means taking control of the language of your life. Poetry names what has been silenced and allows us to understand and articulate our connections to one another and to the world we inhabit. --June Jordan
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The serenity of this poem is completed with the giraffe.
ReplyDeleteI enjoy the tone of little poem as well as the use of allusion, with the inclusion of Megan Creeden. Short and simple :)
ReplyDeleteThis made me smile :) I love the title also! Very nice play on words Eben.
ReplyDeleteThe first two lines perfectly describe this week. GR8 HAIKOO
ReplyDeleteThis is my favorite! Giraffes are love. The simplicity of what you are stating fits nicely in haiku format. Oh, and also I like the title. Good work child!
ReplyDeleteFantasmical poem, however it's lacking something. Now you're probably wondering what could possibly make this piece of poetry genius any better? This: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zD5I_8ESrpA&feature=related
ReplyDeleteA witty and well written poem.
ReplyDeletegreat piece of writing!
ReplyDeletethe title really sets the tone for the poem. i love the deeper meaning that is hidden within.
ReplyDeleteI love this poems simplicity! It makes it great.
ReplyDeletein this poem I saw a radical marxist statement about American materialism. the speaker expresses a strong desire that the current weather (representing corporations) be exchanged for weather that is "nice." he then goes on to explain his ideas for an ideal America, recognizing through his friends love for giraffes that the greatest ideals in life are vegetarianism (the consumption of mainly leaves, metaphorically a lofty goal for society to attain, and also more literally a lofty goal for giraffes), respect for nature, and the virtues of living communally, as in a herd.
ReplyDeletehaha this is awesome.
ReplyDeletefavorite par: oh hai, ku.